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Post by jupianking on Aug 17, 2007 23:23:32 GMT -5
The character.
Adam Olivander Mcnair: Adam: 19: Can control/ manipulate molecules. Changes the state of mater objects have, walk through objects, He can also create things. Adam is young and there fore has not reached his full potential. If he becomes old he can do anything and everything involving molecules.: is this a have two?: On the face Adam has a pair of glasses that make him look smart. The hide the deep gaze of his brown eyes. His Hair is long enough that it needs to be combed but it doesn't cover his eyes or his ears, though they are quite big. His ears I mean Normally his brown hair is combed over. If you look closely you can see his acne scars all over his face.
Adam Has a build of a tooth pick. His Body looks like a science skeleton with skin on. he has practically no muscles. Adam is taller than most geeks, six foot three. His legs are what most of his length is. His hands are the boniest of all his limbs, but their length makes them look that way.
Adam always has on some sort of plaid. Some times he will be seen in polo or a button up white shirt. He prefers plaid. When Adam is out and about he wears a black traveling cloack is. He wears tan or black slacks, no shorts. Who in their right mind would want to see him in shorts? The shoes are black dress shoes, always polished.: Mom, but she was killed: When Adam was a little lad his mother divorced his father. Adam had just started showing signs of his gift and his father hated it. Adam's father almost killed the boy trying to keep it a secret. Three years later Adam's mom died of cancer. This didn't really screw Adam up because the two talked about what would happen when she passed. Sure Adam missed her, but he knew he was taken care of. That is when Little Adam became big Adam and moved to Blackbriar. Adam was mostly bye himself, afraid even in this place that people wouldn't accept him. But bye being alone he managed to find away to get around with out being seen, by gas. : Adam I would like to think is not complicated one. he is very quiet and very alone. That doesn't mean he isn't happy. When he is alone he uses his power in the /quiet/. It lets him feel at home.
Adam does wish to be social but he just is scared, of himself. Adam, at his young age is very temperamental and can lash out when he is struck in a corner. With his power he knows he can hurt people badly. This makes him fearful and keeps to himself.
Underneath all that there is a young man who is wanting to be loved, and wanting to love. To him love is with out fear, total comfort. Adam has never had comfort. That makes his Idea of the meaning of love so appealing.: Killing: Adam thrives in situations that he can out smart his opponent. His mental capability is his greatest attribute. He is most powerful in quiet. It allows him to concentrate all his power on The Molecules and manipulating them. That way he can psyche out his opponent.; Adam can't stand a lot of noise. The sharp screeches are streets make him crumble to the ground powerless. He has no ability to focus leaving him utterly powerless. If he is in a loud place Adam feels uncomfortable and just small and week.: You.
Firelord, Jupianking, Parker: 1 year: x_gasp? I am strait, umm... I don't cuss, I am random. My typing skills are really bad when I go fast so I will slow down for yall.: Mclenen clenched his teeth as a bolt of lightning zipped past his right ear. The young boy dodged left, falling to the ground. "Kasetha" he shouted as he shot a ball of blue fire at O'riley, his brother.
"Mclenen, the old language is dead, don't use it" He said calmly blasting lightning out of his eyes. Mclenen barely dodged the beam before two more came at him. The last one managed to his leg causeing it to become limp. Out of know where Mclenen pulled out two daggers and through then aimed fore the eyes of his brother, they were lined with a ribbon of red flames.
Both of the young men had on Black cloaks. Mclenen looked like a normal human, but O'riley had features of his face twisted and discolored. O'riley was the older brother and filled with hatred. His face showed it. This quarrel was caused bye the two's views on the humans.
The forest danced in the wind as if the two men were fighting in a stadium. After what seemed like hours of silent stares Mclenen Shouted while fire erupted from all over his body, and flew to O'riley. "Kasahoway malicala hesheth"
O'riley was slower than Mclenen and didn't move quick enough to totally evade all of the fire. The feet of his Cloak caught fire and he became very distracted. A dagger flew from Mclenen's hands and landed square in the four head of his brother. O'riley dropped dead in seconds still on fire.
"Good bye brother." A tear fell down his check and into one of the flames on the brother’s cloak. Soon the sky began to weep and the body was engulfed in dancing red flames. Slowly Mclenen walked off to continue his fight to save the humans.
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Post by JC Bytes. on Aug 18, 2007 17:10:47 GMT -5
Hmm... that fact that you removed majority of the preset codes has really made your application difficult to understand. However, I do believe that I got the gist of it.
You need to add on more information about your character's appearance, and personality. The minimum for these two portions of the application was three paragraphs. I also believe that you should rework your history and refrain from using your character's name in every sentence; doing so causes for everything to seem repetitive. ^^;
Denied.
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